In Spirit.
14 Jul 2010 14 Comments
in My Poetry Tags: fear, love, realization, spirits
Last night
I told you that I loved you
And needed you
So much,
I didn’t think I could live
If anything ever happened to you.
You told me not to worry,
If anything ever happened
You would always be with me,
Looking after me
In spirit.
This morning
I had just eaten breakfast
When I recalled this conversation.
A realization
Filled me with so much fear
I was immediately sick
And afterwards I sat there
Breathless, heart thudding,
So frightened
Because what do you do
If you don’t believe
In spirits?
Maria Warren
1993
Jul 15, 2010 @ 11:04:25
Sad but absolutely adorable…
Jul 15, 2010 @ 11:13:20
thank you
x
Jul 18, 2010 @ 22:18:52
My heart actually skipped a beat at the last line … sensational.
Jul 18, 2010 @ 22:24:10
Thank you Tess, really lovely of you to comment, appreciate it so much!
x
Sep 04, 2010 @ 14:48:25
A tad prosaic
Sep 04, 2010 @ 15:33:49
Yes, I agree. It is how I needed to tell it.
Thank you for commenting
Sep 04, 2010 @ 16:16:00
you could always critique mine. Yours is universally admired so maybe you could share some tips.
Sep 04, 2010 @ 16:44:07
My poetry and prose on my blog is mainly written for myself and to share with friends, it is nothing professional, and I am in no position to critique other’s work or to give tips. I feel perhaps your comment about it being universally admired is a little sarcastic? – it can be hard to read intentions from printed words though, so I apologize if I’ve misread you. My blog receives only a small number of hits each day, so it could not even be described as ‘locally’ admired let alone universally!!!
Sep 04, 2010 @ 17:41:26
I’d be really grateful if you would. is it rubbish and should i give up. thanks
Sep 05, 2010 @ 18:12:38
Hi Louise,
I read some of your blog today – you’ve written so much that i’ve really only skimmed the surface so far! Your imagery is really striking and beautiful and the emotions and atmospheres evoked really strong, the way you word things is lovely. You seem to be able to make words flow in a way that I struggle with.
I also really like the style of your journal type entries, really intelligent and also very humorous in places!
I like the entry about the Jeremy Kyle show in your October 07 archive – really spot on points about anorexia.
Your work is definitely not rubbish, it’s really elegant and very worthwhile reading – can you see that?? I think it would be a real shame if you stopped writing.
That you’ve have been writing this so regularly for so long really puts me to shame – self-discipline is something I really need to work on!!
x
Sep 04, 2010 @ 17:45:53
the madosphere is kind of hierarchical and exclusive and i can’t seem to break into it.
Sep 04, 2010 @ 18:27:39
I just remembered seeing your blog name mentioned in TWIM’s this morning – I knew it seemed familiar! My blog isn’t a ‘mental health’ blog, although there are a couple of things on it so far that are mental health related incidentally, so I’m not really a part of the madosphere in that sense – but I do read a lot of mental health blogs and related sites as it’s really important to me.
I’d like to read some of your poetry – I just had a quick look at your site – wow – you have a lot on there! I have to go out now so won’t be able to have a proper look until tomorrow, but if there are any poems in particular that you want to share then please just leave links. x
Sep 10, 2010 @ 21:59:33
Hi, Magicplum,
What on earth made me write such mean things. you combine the everyday with the sublime quite exquisitely – like Elisabeth Smart’s ‘By Grand Central Station I Sat Down and Wept’ Our minutiae is what makes us, punctuated by the euphoria that accompanies love. and i love how you’ve bludgeoned blogger into submission. beautifully designed site.
i sometimes get a bit weird from time to time – usually after loadsa zopiclone. but that’s no excuse and I apologise.
love
‘rie the resident weird person
Sep 10, 2010 @ 23:22:53
Hi Louise,
Thank you for this, it’s really lovely of you – I actually didn’t think you were that mean, just a little tetchy perhaps?!
I understand re the zopiclone, I had a bit of a love/hate relationship with it.
Hope your weekend goes well,
take care,
Maria x